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Title: The men who rode on chickens
Paragraph One: Describe your character (man) Desmond, Jalen Peteli, William, Miss Berry, Tevita, Jaden, Vinolia, Damien, Phazon, Anahera, Chyrus, Ellen,Lewina, alyia, seni, Trinity, Alex,Angelo,Junior,John Lee,Lucy,Bradley
Paragraph Two: How he found the chickens
Paragraph Three: he was scared to ride the chicken.
Conclusion:
1 P Once upon a time there was a boy called Alex.He alway wore a hat to the forest.Sometimes he likes to wear A big raincoat. when he finishes he like to ride a horse but he is a Bad boy. he always has fights with his brothers. Something was about to happen to Alex and was going to change his life.
2 P One day he ran away from his house because his parents gave him a hiding. When he ran to the forest he said that he is gonna find a chickens. To ride to another Country so he went get a new life. So when he went to the forest the forest said to him what do you want to give you. I know that you ran away from your house because god told me he said that i have to give you something.
3 P So he said that he want to get a huge chicken so the forest said okay then stand back. Because they a gonna run into you so when the brunch came out of his face and said hulk Hogan.Then the whole chicken crash into him and he said nooooooooo i am in one it is so scary and it is a old man. Help me someone.
4 P And the tree said that you said that you want a chickens to go somewhere so you. But he said that he doesn't know yet where should he go to but he said i can give you someone to ride with. It will be Jalen who is strong and he has a man bun.And the other person is peteli he is a demi god his father is the god of war and he is strong and bulky.
5 P So he said okay then and they came down of the sky and Jalen said who is this guy god and he said this is.A boy who ran away from his house and Peteli said oh my gosh let go know before there mum and dad will come.
6 P God said who do you want me to give to ride down there They said can you get a plane that it is faster and we can get there.But he said okay then i will give it to you but i can’t give you gas because you guys have power.
7 P And when he said move back then so when they move back the plane came down of the sky slowly and and Jalen lift up Alex and frow him to the plane and said you drive we sit and sleep because you need our help.so he said i can’t drive this long over night because i will sleep and he Peteli said okay then you give us 10 hour.
Two sleep and you will take a rest okay and he said okay then but when they got there they said do you know where we going and he said no. we a here know we a at tonga so know we can bullied a house and live there.
5 P So he said okay then and they came down of the sky and Jalen said who is this guy god and he said this is.A boy who ran away from his house and Peteli said oh my gosh let go know before there mum and dad will come.
6 P God said who do you want me to give to ride down there They said can you get a plane that it is faster and we can get there.But he said okay then i will give it to you but i can’t give you gas because you guys have power.
7 P And when he said move back then so when they move back the plane came down of the sky slowly and and Jalen lift up Alex and frow him to the plane and said you drive we sit and sleep because you need our help.so he said i can’t drive this long over night because i will sleep and he Peteli said okay then you give us 10 hour.
Two sleep and you will take a rest okay and he said okay then but when they got there they said do you know where we going and he said no. we a here know we a at tonga so know we can bullied a house and live there.
hi Lanzie i like the work you have been doing keep up the good work
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